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[Timesheets LC comment] Editorial

Doug Schepers-3

Dear SYMM WG-

This is a Last Call review comment from the SVG WG on the SMIL
Timesheets 1.0 specification, W3C Working Draft 10 January 2008,
http://www.w3.org/TR/2008/WD-timesheets-20080110/ .  Please let us know
if you have any questions by replying to [hidden email].


Typos
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"a-temporal" -> "atemporal"
"Timeshets" -> "Timesheets"
"Timsheets" -> "Timesheets"
"Timesshets" -> "Timesheets"
"meadiaSize" -> "mediaSize"
"meadiaTime" -> "mediaTime"
"allways" -> "always"
"severall" -> "several"
"oredered" -> "ordered"
"attibute" -> "attribute"
"semi-colon" -> "semicolon"

Grammatical and Punctuation Corrections
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"SMIL Timesheets includes the SMIL 3.0 PrefetchControl module and the
SMIL 3.0 BasicAnimation module is used for controlling animations." ->
"SMIL Timesheets includes the SMIL 3.0 PrefetchControl module, and the
SMIL 3.0 BasicAnimation module is used for controlling animations."

"On the other hand, the begin attribute of a children of a excl
timecontainer is "indefinite"." -> "By contrast, the begin attribute of
the children of a excl time container is "indefinite"."

"The par element short for "parallel", defines a simple time grouping in
which multiple elements can play back at the same." -> "The par element,
short for "parallel", defines a simple time grouping in which multiple
elements can play back simultaneously."

"checks, whether the current active child is the first child" -> "checks
whether the current active child is the first child"

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There are several incidents of missing definite or indefinite articles,
or where the article or verb conjugation does not agree with the number.
  Here are a few examples:
"The children of the seq element consider the end time of preceding
child as their syncbase."
"Figure 1: Timeline of a Timesheets"
"Host document's" -> "A host document's"
"By default the begin attibute of a children of a seq and a par
timecontainers is "0s"."


Regards-
-Doug Schepers, on behalf of the SVG WG